Script ideas

My Script
one long tracking shot.
Genre - comedy drama
It begins with a man walking down the street. The camera follows him from behind on a dolly. After walking for around 10 seconds he trips on a curb, nearly falling. He sighs, but carries on. 10 seconds later, he walks closely past a group of people, who barge him, tell him to watch where he is walking, then push him away in the direction he was walking. He is still walking, and in anger kicks a bin, hurting his foot and hopping briefly. A man in a business suit with a briefcase drops the briefcase, when, he helps, the man tells him to go away. He then gets to a road, where he nearly gets hit by a car, and the driver gets angry and shouts at him. Finally, he walks up to his front door. The camera switches to being in the house, and zooms  into the door, as he opens it from the outside and enters. He walks past the camera. As he is entering, the title, which is white, fades in. The credits will be playing at the bottom throughout.

Alex's Script

Studio logos flash by.

The camera begins to pan up the body of an unconscious man, credits appear on the screen, as the camera stops on the mans face his eyes open and he sits up, the camera stays on his face, the man is breathing heavily, he looks left and right, the camera shoots out to a wide angle. The man is on the top story of a multi-story car park, the man stumbles to his feet and rubs his eyes, he stumbles to the edge and looks out across the surrounding area, he hears a noise, he turns and a man dressed head to toe in black appears walking towards him, the man runs and goes for the stairs at every level is a man in black, he eventually get to the bottom and stumbles out into the street, people look at him in shock, he runs across the road, climbs over a railing and across another, he gets to the other side and stops, he is still breathing heavily, he looks down at his hands and on it is written “Carrera”, camera pans up to the top level of the car-park and sees a sniper setting up, camera is now with the sniper as he sets up. He goes to the edge and lines gut up, camera is shot through the scope of the gun, as it is lined up to his head, goes back to the man he starts to run, we hear a gunshot, the screen goes black, up on the screen comes writing reading “CARRERA” 

END

Jack's Script

Silent Introduction other than sounds such as wind, furniture moving e.g curtains fluttering, and ambient sounds that generate effect.

Setting is in a dark room, wooden floors and bits of furniture such as dressers, table, mirror, a window etc. There is a person sitting down on a chair backed against a wall with their eyes closed. The fades in from black onto the crooked floor and slowly moves around the room in a circular fashion, focusing on eerie features of the room like a watch, clock, and jewellery, as well as the main furniture such as the drawers with a draw ajar, curtains fluttering in the howling wind, and the mirror where the blurred, faint outline of the figure can barely be seen. The camera continues travelling around the room in a circular movement until it comes to a stop at the figure with their eyes closed. The camera slowly zooms in until there is just a letterbox of the persons eyes, where it stops. The persons eyes dart open and a musical string plays before the camera cuts to black. Throughout the video there are eerie noises and sound effects playing that generate a creepy effect.

Comments on our scripts

Reece's: Different to a lot of the other ones, good use of tracking shot. Ambitious with car.

Alex's: Ambitious with the car, cool use of sniper, good location,

Jack's: Good establishing/tracking shot and good description of the set. Very poetic.

We have chosen Alex's script.

We chose this script because, although we like both mine and Jack's scripts, we felt they both had practical issues regarding location and equipment. We felt Alex's script was the most practical to make into a film opening, as we already had an idea for a location for it, and the location being a multi story means we can use any other multi story car park if we do not get permission to use the one we have selected.

Questionnaire
These are questions we would ask to our target audience, which is 12-50 year old Men.

- Would you watch a film with this premise?
- Do you like the idea as a whole?
- Would you feel disorientated when watching shaky-cam?
- Have you seen something like this before?
- Would you continue watching to find out what is happening?